Version # 1
Backwashes in time
Reservoirs of our old pain
Open the flood gates
© 2019 M.N. Hopkins
Version # 2
Backwashes in time
Reservoirs of our old pain
Let loose, ride the wave
© 2019 M.N. Hopkins
Version # 3
Backwashes in time
Reservoirs of our old pain
Fear not and let go
© 2019 M.N Hopkins
Version # 4
Backwashes in time
Reservoirs of our old pain
Will you drain the swamp?
© 2019 M.N. Hopkins
Version # 5
Backwashes in time
Reservoirs of our old pain
Will you drain the pain?
© 2019 M.N. Hopkins
Note: In this poem the first line of it just popped into my head yesterday evening and the second line I constructed to fit the first. The third line can to me over two days in five different versions. I usually pick one version and discard the rest. This time I decided to publish five different haiku poems with the same theme just slightly different wording. I will ask you to pick the poem you think is best. You can tell me which one in the comment section with a number, 1 to 5 if you would be so kind and are willing to do so. I published all five poems on my blog today for the first time on the 6th of August, 2019.
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Poetry by M.N. Hopkins
6 comments:
I much prefer #1. It seems more dramatic and archaic
Hello Jason and thanks for your comment. I appreciate your input.
Kind regards,
Mike
Hello!
Nice poem. I think it was good with many versions because after finishing the message was clear.
So first I liked No 4 best because it gave me a analogy of what it was all about, but after re-reading later I prefer No 2, because it feels like those words raise the consciousness to a level of being more receptive to healing.
Kindest regards
Magnus
Hi,
I think all five of your verifications are very good. Each of them is individual and therefore good in its own way. Comparable to humans. Also here the differences are big or only small. But in itself already a perfect creation of his self. I'm sorry, I can't make up my mind....
Thanks for your reply to my question, Nami Kaze.
Kind regards,
Mike
Thanks for your input Magnus. Much appreciated.
Kindest regards,
Mike
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